Admittedly i'm not the most creative of people and it's hard to explain what you visualise when you have an idea, but this was one of the things we needed to cover. The questions that would help us cover the basic's when we pitched were:
- What is the idea of your film short?
- Are you able to present your short so that the class as a potential audience or crew can visualise it?
- Are your film making intentions realistic and practical?
- Is your idea creative and interesting?
- Does your idea meet the criteria of a 'short'?
With these questions in mind we had to base a pitch around it and cover all the answers.
Now; here is my film short pitch. Afterwards I will evaluate it and highlight where the improvements are to be made.
Now; here is my film short pitch. Afterwards I will evaluate it and highlight where the improvements are to be made.
So after watching it you can see that this isn't a very in detail plot of the short.
The plot goes;
Gary Wilde is a 20 yr old passive person, through out his life he's always done what he's told followed his father's dream for him and married a woman his father approved of. The short will begin in Gary's office where he is working away at his computer and the opening shot will be a pile stacked up documents that get dropped on his desk by his boss. I want to convey in this short that Gary's boss is a bully who doesn't care for his hard working employee's like Gary. This scene will have dialogue along the lines of Gary's boss telling him that he didn't get the promotion because he's too nice and he just didn't feel Gary wanted the job that bad.
*Grey scale flash back* Gary's dad telling him he's no good, he's a push over, he'll never make a name for himself, he's a disappointment etc. This will hopefully create a tension bubbling effect kind of like pressure building in a bottle till the cork pops.
The scene will then cut back to his self centered boss but the narration will be his wife's voice Regina and her dialogue of putting him down telling him he's a lousy husband, he wasn't a man he was a scared little boy etc. the voice of his dad and Regina echo in his head with non diagetic music, while the scene still stays on his boss laughing at him and talking in slow motion, the music will reach a crescendo and Gary will break, Everything comes back to real time of his boss talking and Gary stands up and sweeps everything off his desk and starts to trash his office. Gary grabs his coat puts it on and tells his boss he quits. This will then cut to him walking home, getting home and confronting his wife who he also breaks at and tells her its over and he wants a divorce and he's following his dreams. The last shot will be of Gary laughing with glee as he leaves his house with art supplies and a wide shot of him sat with drawing paper on a canal smiling to himself with diagetic bird sounds to represent tranquility will be the closing scene to this feel good short.
What went well presenting it?
I presented the main elements needed to understand why the short is called "Break" and why my protagonist does break, I covered my basics of genre and audience and explained why I thought my choosing of these were appropriate too.
What I found difficult?
What I found the most difficult was trying to form my idea's into a tangible vision and get my peers to see this vision with me, it would be a lot easier if we could just hook our brains up to someone and see the visualisation they had in mind, BUT as this is not yet possible I had to rely on my words which was more difficult than anticipated.
Things I would do next time
Next time I pitch I will take advantage of the use of a presentation, I feel this could have given the audience a better understanding of what I was envisioning and it's much easier to write your idea's down on a presentation and then present the things that need to be given more detail and explanation.
As you can hear in the video my peers asked some very good questions as they needed things clarifying or they would like to point things out to me.
- Tina: " What's the message?"
My answer: "Not to let people push you around" To elaborate on that my message is that you shouldn't stand for people like that, it's your life and you are the one living it so you should run it how you want it to be ran and not take anyone else's input unless wanted. This of course is an extreme of having your life run by someone else but the message is still the same, you shouldn't let anyone make the decisions in your life for you and you don't have to stand for it, good things come from taking control over your own life. - Charlotte: " you know you said that they are married, are they going to be a young couple and how old?"
This is an obvious concern when we are only young media students that don't have access to a wide range of older actors and actresses
My answer: " They will be a young couple which is why the marriage isn't working out, they'll be round about 20 and the only reason they are married so young is that the wife and his father forced him into it and she wants to mold him into the perfect husband" - " I do have older people at access that don't mind acting if I have to have older people too" - Jack: " You say you're going to trash an office or trash a house, Where are you going to do that?"
My answer: "My dad's office will be where I the chaos will happen" This is a good question because once again as we are a non budgeted media group producing this short, we can't just buy a scene set of an office or make one that we can readily trash, we have to work with what we've got and if we don't have it then we can't work with it.
Now that all the questions were covered and the film pitch is done, we start training with our new Cannon DSLR camera's.
